diff --git a/Kansen4_patch.xp3 b/Kansen4_patch.xp3
index fca4e41..9849622 100644
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diff --git a/Kansen4_patch/a0010.ks b/Kansen4_patch/a0010.ks
index 61ac0cb..39f9f2d 100644
--- a/Kansen4_patch/a0010.ks
+++ b/Kansen4_patch/a0010.ks
@@ -39,8 +39,8 @@
 
 *1|
 [fc]
-Fighter jets flew by. A cluster of fighter jets in formation passed[r]
-overhead three times in a row, accompanied by a thunderous roar.[pcms]
+Fighter jets flew by. A formation of fighter jets flew overhead three[r]
+times in a row, accompanied by a roaring sound.[pcms]
 
 [bg storage="bg16b"][trans_c cross time=500]
 
@@ -53,7 +53,7 @@ overhead three times in a row, accompanied by a thunderous roar.[pcms]
 *2|
 [fc]
 [ns]Shou[nse]
-"...What's that? Again and again..."[pcms]
+"...What's that? One after another..."[pcms]
 
 *3|
 [fc]
@@ -90,8 +90,8 @@ overhead three times in a row, accompanied by a thunderous roar.[pcms]
 
 *5|
 [fc]
-As Shou said this, he got into the car, turned the key that was[r]
-already inserted lightly, and switched on the radio.[pcms]
+As Shou said this, he got into the car, turned the key lightly, and[r]
+switched on the radio.[pcms]
 
 *6|
 [fc]
@@ -105,13 +105,13 @@ already inserted lightly, and switched on the radio.[pcms]
 [ns]Male Voice[nse]
 "...Emergency notification from the Self-Defense Forces. Emergency[r]
 notification from the Self-Defense Forces. In accordance with[r]
-emergency protocols, the central command will begin managing all[r]
+emergency protocols, the command headquarters will begin managing all[r]
 communication frequencies."[pcms]
 
 *8|
 [fc]
 [ns]Male Voice[nse]
-"One-eight-zero-zero, bombing by stationed forces will commence. Any[r]
+"Operation 1800, the stationed forces will commence bombing. Any[r]
 civilian survivors listening to this broadcast should immediately take[r]
 evacuation measures and start informing other survivors."[pcms]
 
@@ -171,7 +171,7 @@ such as Ryogamine, Karasuyama, and Shiramoriyama. I repeat..."[pcms]
 *15|
 [fc]
 We who had gathered around Shou's car couldn't believe the broadcast[r]
-content right away. Everyone was half-stunned.[pcms]
+right away. Everyone was half in shock.[pcms]
 
 *16|
 [fc]
@@ -187,16 +187,16 @@ Still...[pcms]
 *18|
 [fc]
 [ns]Shou[nse]
-"If this is true... No, it probably is true. Damn it, hey! We need to[r]
-get back to town quickly! Get in! Saeko? Hey, Saeko--!! Hurry up--!!"[pcms]
+"If this is true... no, it probably is true. Damn it, hey! We need to[r]
+get back to town fast! Get in! Saeko? Hey, Saeko--!! Hurry up--!!"[pcms]
 
 [chara_int][trans_c cross time=150]
 
 *19|
 [fc]
-Looking back, I saw Saeko-san walking towards us from the direction of[r]
-the cottage. When she noticed Shou's call, she waved her hand and[r]
-started jogging towards us.[pcms]
+Looking back, I saw Saeko-san walking towards us from the cottage.[r]
+When she noticed Shou calling out to her, she waved her hand and[r]
+started jogging over.[pcms]
 
 ;//自動車フレーム表示(運転席・夕・キャラ付き)
 [CarSetBase carbase="car_flame_driver_b"]
@@ -209,13 +209,13 @@ started jogging towards us.[pcms]
 
 *20|
 [fc]
-Shou nodded at Saeko-san's response and perhaps to psych himself up,[r]
-he slapped the steering wheel with a bang and turned the key all the[r]
-way to start the engine.[pcms]
+Shou nodded at Saeko-san's response and, perhaps to psych himself up,[r]
+slapped the steering wheel hard once and turned the key all the way to[r]
+start the engine.[pcms]
 
 *21|
 [fc]
-No... He tried to start it.[pcms]
+No... he tried to start it.[pcms]
 
 ;//■_エンジン音（エンジンがかからない音）
 ;//se007.ogg(LOOP)
@@ -230,8 +230,8 @@ No... He tried to start it.[pcms]
 
 *23|
 [fc]
-Shou repeatedly turned the key all the way. But the engine wouldn't[r]
-make a lively sound; only a futile whirring noise echoed.[pcms]
+Shou kept turning the key all the way several times. But the engine[r]
+wouldn't make a lively sound; only a futile whirring noise echoed.[pcms]
 
 *24|
 [fc]
@@ -247,7 +247,7 @@ make a lively sound; only a futile whirring noise echoed.[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_mak s="mako_0370"]
 [ns]Makoto[nse]
-"I-I'll help too! Shou, hurry and open the hood!"[pcms]
+"I'll help too! Shou, hurry and open the hood!"[pcms]
 
 ;//se即時停止
 [stopse buf=0]
@@ -265,7 +265,7 @@ make a lively sound; only a futile whirring noise echoed.[pcms]
 [fc]
 Makoto and I jumped out of the car we were about to get into. In the[r]
 corner of my eye, I saw Saeko-san stop and look towards the forest[r]
-beside her.[pcms]
+next to us.[pcms]
 
 ;//■_ボンネット開ける
 ;//se009.ogg
@@ -290,9 +290,9 @@ in.[pcms]
 
 *30|
 [fc]
-Saeko-san's sudden scream made us turn towards her voice in a panic. A[r]
-strange man was approaching her with both hands outstretched as if[r]
-trying to embrace her as she backed away.[pcms]
+Saeko-san's sudden scream made us turn around in a panic. A strange[r]
+man was approaching her with both hands outstretched as if trying to[r]
+embrace her as she backed away.[pcms]
 
 *31|
 [fc]
@@ -307,7 +307,7 @@ trying to embrace her as she backed away.[pcms]
 *32|
 [fc]
 [ns]Shou[nse]
-"Saeko! What's that bastard doing?!"[pcms]
+"Saeko--! What's that bastard doing to my woman?!!"[pcms]
 
 ;//se003.ogg
 [se buf=0 storage="se003"]
@@ -317,7 +317,7 @@ trying to embrace her as she backed away.[pcms]
 
 *33|
 [fc]
-Shou jumped out of the car and ran towards Saeko-san.[pcms]
+Shou leapt out of the car and ran towards Saeko-san.[pcms]
 
 *34|
 [fc]
@@ -342,8 +342,8 @@ I told Makoto to "Take care of the engine!" and chased after Shou.[pcms]
 
 *36|
 [fc]
-Where did that guy come from? There wasn't supposed to be anyone else[r]
-at this campsite but us.[pcms]
+Where did that guy come from? There shouldn't have been anyone else at[r]
+this campsite but us.[pcms]
 
 *37|
 [fc]
@@ -352,49 +352,48 @@ towards Saeko-san, trying to grab her.[pcms]
 
 *38|
 [fc]
-Saeko-san was backing away with a look of horror on her face. But[r]
-perhaps due to fear, her legs seemed to tremble and her steps were[r]
-unsteady.[pcms]
+Saeko-san ahead of him was backing away with a look of horror on her[r]
+face. But perhaps due to fear, her legs seemed to tremble and her[r]
+steps were unsteady.[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="is_bA07"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
 *39|
 [fc]
 [ns]Shou[nse]
-"You bastard!! What are you doing to my woman?!!"[pcms]
+"You bastard--!! What are you doing to my woman?!!"[pcms]
 
 *40|
 [fc]
-Just as the man's hand was about to reach Saeko-san, Shou grabbed his[r]
-collar and pulled him back. With that momentum, he tried to pull him[r]
-down...[pcms]
+Just as the man's hands were about to reach Saeko-san, Shou grabbed[r]
+him by the collar and yanked him back. With that momentum, he tried to[r]
+pull him down...[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="etc_02c"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
 *41|
 [fc]
 [ns]Infected Man A[nse]
-"...A man? I don't need... men... end... oh..."[pcms]
+"...a man? I don't need... a man...ugh..."[pcms]
 
 *42|
 [fc]
-The man slowly turned around and pulled his own collar back[r]
-forcefully.[pcms]
+Slowly turning around, the man pulled his own collar back with force.[pcms]
 
 *43|
 [fc]
-Even Shou with his strong build was pulled forward as he held onto the[r]
-collar, almost stumbling forward.[pcms]
+Shou, with his strong build, was pulled forward, almost stumbling as[r]
+he was yanked by the collar he had grabbed.[pcms]
 
 *44|
 [fc]
 [ns]Daisuke[nse]
-"Shou!!"[pcms]
+"Shou-kun!!"[pcms]
 
 *45|
 [fc]
-I managed to catch up and grabbed the back of the man's clothes to[r]
-help Shou pull him backward.[pcms]
+I managed to catch up and grabbed the back of the man's clothes,[r]
+helping Shou by pulling him backwards.[pcms]
 
 *46|
 [fc]
@@ -403,7 +402,7 @@ With both of us pulling, the man finally staggered backward.[pcms]
 *47|
 [fc]
 [ns]Infected Man A[nse]
-"...Ugh... Ohh... wo... men..."[pcms]
+"...ugh...oh...a...woman..."[pcms]
 
 [chara_int][trans_c cross time=150]
 [quake_bg xy m]
@@ -414,15 +413,15 @@ With both of us pulling, the man finally staggered backward.[pcms]
 
 *48|
 [fc]
-Due to the momentum, he stumbled back several steps and then plopped[r]
-down on his butt right there.[pcms]
+Due to the momentum, the man stumbled several steps backward and then[r]
+plopped down on his butt.[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="is_bA03"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
 *49|
 [fc]
 [ns]Shou[nse]
-"Saeko!! Saeko!! Hey! Pull yourself together!"[pcms]
+"Saeko!! Saeko!! Hey! Hang in there!"[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ki_bA05"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -430,39 +429,39 @@ down on his butt right there.[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_sae s="sae_0156"]
 [ns]Saeko[nse]
-"Ah... eh... yes..."[pcms]
+"Ah...uh...yes..."[pcms]
 
 *51|
 [fc]
-Saeko-san was shaken by Shou-kun, her hands trembling as she tried to[r]
-respond to him, her face pale.[pcms]
+Saeko-san, shaken by Shou-kun, trembled with her hands but still[r]
+managed to respond to him with a pale face.[pcms]
 
 ;//キャラ消し
 [chara_int][trans_c cross time=150]
 
 *52|
 [fc]
-The man who had fallen was fumbling around. It was unclear if he was[r]
+The fallen man was fumbling around. It was unclear if he was[r]
 struggling to get up or just flailing.[pcms]
 
 *53|
 [fc]
-It finally dawned on me how abnormal the man was.[pcms]
+I finally noticed something was off about the man.[pcms]
 
 *54|
 [fc]
-His clothes were torn and muddy all over. Moreover, his pants had[r]
-fallen down to his thighs, exposing his lower half.[pcms]
+His clothes were torn and muddy in places. Moreover, his pants were[r]
+pulled down to his thighs, exposing his lower half.[pcms]
 
 *55|
 [fc]
-But I had a feeling he was different from your typical flasher or[r]
-pervert.[pcms]
+But it didn't feel like he was just a flasher or a molester.[pcms]
 
 *56|
 [fc]
-Something else... His half-open mouth, his arms flailing, his legs[r]
-kicking wildly; all of these things highlighted the man's strangeness.[pcms]
+Something else was different... his half-open mouth, his flailing[r]
+arms, his thrashing legs; all of these things indicated the man's[r]
+abnormality.[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=3 chbase="is_bA09"][ChrSetXY layer=3 x=0 y=0]
 [ChrSetEx layer=4 chbase="ki_bA05"][ChrSetXY layer=4 x=324 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
@@ -476,17 +475,17 @@ kicking wildly; all of these things highlighted the man's strangeness.[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_sae s="sae_0157"]
 [ns]Saeko[nse]
-"Eh... yes. I'm... I'm okay... Thank you, Shou-chan."[pcms]
+"Uh...yes. I'm... I'm fine. Thank you, Shou-chan."[pcms]
 
 *59|
 [fc]
-Embraced by Shou-kun, Saeko-san finally managed to give a firm[r]
+Embraced by Shou-kun, Saeko-san finally seemed able to give a firm[r]
 response.[pcms]
 
 *60|
 [fc]
-We didn't have time to dawdle. Although the man was still struggling[r]
-to get up, we had only pulled him down; we hadn't incapacitated him.[pcms]
+There was no time to dawdle. The man was still struggling to get up,[r]
+and although we had pulled him down, we hadn't incapacitated him.[pcms]
 
 *61|
 [fc]
@@ -496,7 +495,7 @@ to get up, we had only pulled him down; we hadn't incapacitated him.[pcms]
 *62|
 [fc]
 [ns]Shou[nse]
-"Oh, oh! Saeko, we're heading back to town."[pcms]
+"Yeah, yeah. Saeko, we're heading back to town."[pcms]
 
 *63|
 [fc]
@@ -508,8 +507,8 @@ to get up, we had only pulled him down; we hadn't incapacitated him.[pcms]
 
 *64|
 [fc]
-Makoto's scream rang out. She was slowly backing away from the shadow[r]
-of a car, followed by the sight of a man's hand.[pcms]
+Makoto's scream rose. She was backing away from the shadow of the car,[r]
+followed by a man's hand reaching out towards her.[pcms]
 
 *65|
 [fc]
@@ -547,12 +546,12 @@ running followed from behind.[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_koz s="kozu_0266"]
 [ns]Kozue[nse]
-"No! What? What is this? Kyaaah!"[pcms]
+"No!! What is this? What's happening? Kyaaah!"[pcms]
 
 *70|
 [fc]
-I couldn't see Kozue. But I could hear the sound of her banging on the[r]
-car body. Was she being attacked too? How many of them were there?[pcms]
+I couldn't see Kozue. But I could hear banging on the car body. Was[r]
+Kozue being attacked too? How many of them were there?[pcms]
 
 *71|
 [fc]
@@ -570,8 +569,8 @@ san is!!"[pcms]
 
 *72|
 [fc]
-With that shout, Masaka-san pulled Kozue's hand and leaped out from[r]
-behind the car.[pcms]
+With that shout, Aya-san pulled Kozue's hand and leaped out from the[r]
+car.[pcms]
 
 [chara_int][ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ab_cA03"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -579,7 +578,7 @@ behind the car.[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_mak s="mako_0372"]
 [ns]Makoto[nse]
-"Gyaa! Damn it!! Stay away!! Don't come closer!"[pcms]
+"Gyaa! Damn it!! Stay away!! Don't come near me!"[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ma_eA05"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -593,8 +592,7 @@ behind the car.[pcms]
 
 *75|
 [fc]
-Masaka-san pulled on Makoto's arm and ran towards me while looking[r]
-back.[pcms]
+Aya-san pulled on Makoto's arm and ran towards me while looking back.[pcms]
 
 ;//se即時停止(CH3)
 [stopse buf=1]
@@ -602,7 +600,7 @@ back.[pcms]
 *76|
 [fc]
 [ns]Daisuke[nse]
-"Makoto, Kozue, Masaka-san! Are you all okay?!!"[pcms]
+"Makoto, Kozue, Aya-san! Are you all okay?!!"[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="nt_cB03"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=40][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -610,7 +608,7 @@ back.[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_koz s="kozu_0267"]
 [ns]Kozue[nse]
-"No, Daisuke-niichan. What is this, it's scary."[pcms]
+"No, Daisuke-nii-chan. What is this? It's scary."[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ab_cA03"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -618,11 +616,11 @@ back.[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_mak s="mako_0373"]
 [ns]Makoto[nse]
-"Damn it, what's with these guys!! They're weird, creepy!"[pcms]
+"Damn it, what's with those guys?! They're weird, creepy!"[pcms]
 
 *79|
 [fc]
-Kozue looked pale as if she was about to cry and collapse any moment.[r]
+Kozue looked pale as if she might cry or collapse at any moment.[r]
 Makoto's words were strong, but her face was pale and her shoulders[r]
 were trembling slightly.[pcms]
 
@@ -636,13 +634,14 @@ were trembling slightly.[pcms]
 
 *81|
 [fc]
-The only one who seemed composed and resolute was Masaka-san. She must[r]
-be scared too, but she seemed more concerned about Saeko-san.[pcms]
+The only one who remained composed and resolute was Masaka-san. I[r]
+thought she must be scared, but she seemed more concerned about Saeko-[r]
+san.[pcms]
 
 *82|
 [fc]
 [ns]Daisuke[nse]
-"Yeah, she's okay. Look, she's right there behind you with Shou-kun."[pcms]
+"Yeah, she's fine. Look, she's coming with Shou-kun, right?"[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ma_eC03"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -656,13 +655,15 @@ be scared too, but she seemed more concerned about Saeko-san.[pcms]
 
 *84|
 [fc]
-Right in front of the administration building, I met up with the[r]
-girls. But behind them, a multitude of men were slowly approaching us.[pcms]
+Right in front of the management building, I was able to meet up with[r]
+the girls. But behind them, I could see countless men slowly[r]
+approaching us.[pcms]
 
 *85|
 [fc]
-How many were there? Each one of them was filthy, walking sluggishly[r]
-towards us. They wore faint smiles, and some even drooled.[pcms]
+How many of them are there? Each one of them is dressed in filthy[r]
+clothes, walking with a sluggish gait. They all have faint smiles on[r]
+their faces, and some even have drool dripping down.[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="is_bA07"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -684,16 +685,16 @@ towards us. They wore faint smiles, and some even drooled.[pcms]
 
 *87|
 [fc]
-I turned around in a flash to see Shou-kun being pulled down by a man[r]
-who had grabbed his clothes. The man ignored the fallen Shou-kun and[r]
-went towards Saeko-san who had been separated.[pcms]
+When I turned around in a hurry, I saw Shou-kun being pulled down by a[r]
+man who had grabbed his clothes. The man ignored Shou-kun, who had[r]
+fallen, and went towards Saeko-san, who had been separated.[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="etc_03c"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
 *88|
 [fc]
 [ns]Infected Man B[nse]
-"Hehe...heh...a woman...yeah..."[pcms]
+"Hehe... he... woman... there..."[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ki_bB02"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -705,9 +706,9 @@ went towards Saeko-san who had been separated.[pcms]
 
 *90|
 [fc]
-Saeko-san was in danger. Just as I was about to rush over, Shou-kun[r]
-sprang up and shoved the staggering man away, grabbing Saeko-san's arm[r]
-to run.[pcms]
+Saeko-san was in danger. The moment I was about to rush out, Shou-kun[r]
+sprang up, struck the staggering man, grabbed Saeko-san's arm, and[r]
+tried to run.[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ki_bB03"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -725,13 +726,13 @@ to run.[pcms]
 
 *92|
 [fc]
-Saeko-san fell with a thud. The man Shou-kun had shoved grabbed her[r]
-leg tightly as he fell.[pcms]
+Saeko-san fell to the ground with a thud. The man she had struck fell[r]
+down but firmly grasped her leg.[pcms]
 
 *93|
 [fc]
 [ns]Infected Man B[nse]
-"Heh...hehehe...let's...do it..."[pcms]
+"He... hehehe... let's... do it..."[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="is_bA07"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -745,9 +746,8 @@ leg tightly as he fell.[pcms]
 
 *95|
 [fc]
-Shou-kun stomped on the man's arm. However, the man's grip didn't[r]
-loosen; instead, he gripped Saeko-san's leg tighter, his nails digging[r]
-in.[pcms]
+Shou-kun stomped on the man's arm. However, the man's hand did not let[r]
+go; instead, he gripped Saeko-san's leg tighter, and his nails dug in.[pcms]
 
 ;//se047.ogg
 [se buf=0 storage="se047"]
@@ -764,7 +764,7 @@ in.[pcms]
 *97|
 [fc]
 [ns]Shou[nse]
-"Damn it! You bastard! Let go! Let go of her!!"[pcms]
+"Damn it! You bastard! Let go! Let her go!!"[pcms]
 
 ;//se047.ogg
 [se buf=0 storage="se047"]
@@ -778,8 +778,9 @@ in.[pcms]
 
 *98|
 [fc]
-There was a dull snap. After several stomps from Shou-kun, the man's[r]
-grip finally loosened, and Saeko-san was lifted up by Shou-kun.[pcms]
+With a crack... After several stomps by Shou-kun, a dull sound was[r]
+heard. Finally, the man's grip loosened, and Saeko-san was lifted up[r]
+by Shou-kun.[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=3 chbase="etc_02a"][ChrSetXY layer=3 x=0 y=0]
 [ChrSetEx layer=4 chbase="etc_04a"][ChrSetXY layer=4 x=324 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
@@ -787,12 +788,12 @@ grip finally loosened, and Saeko-san was lifted up by Shou-kun.[pcms]
 *99|
 [fc]
 [ns]Infected Man C[nse]
-"Women...so many nice women..."[pcms]
+"Woman... there are lots of women..."[pcms]
 
 *100|
 [fc]
 [ns]Infected Man D[nse]
-"I'm hungry...yeah...women are good too..."[pcms]
+"I'm... hungry... women are... nice..."[pcms]
 
 [chara_int][ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="nt_UP_cB01"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=0 y=40][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -800,19 +801,19 @@ grip finally loosened, and Saeko-san was lifted up by Shou-kun.[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_koz s="kozu_0268"]
 [ns]Kozue[nse]
-"Daisuke-niichan...I'm scared."[pcms]
+"Daisuke-nii-chan... I'm scared."[pcms]
 
 *102|
 [fc]
-Distracted by the unbelievable situation unfolding before me, I was[r]
-brought back to reality by Kozue's voice as she clung to me. Looking[r]
-around, I saw the men slowly closing in on us.[pcms]
+Caught up in the unbelievable situation unfolding before me, I was[r]
+distracted until Kozue's voice clinging to me brought me back to[r]
+reality. Looking around, I saw the men slowly closing in.[pcms]
 
 *103|
 [fc]
-Shou-kun said to get back to the car, but there was no guarantee the[r]
-engine would start. Besides, it seemed difficult to break through the[r]
-slowly tightening encirclement. That left only one option I could[r]
+Shou-kun said to get back to the car, but there was no guarantee that[r]
+the engine would start. Moreover, it seemed difficult to break through[r]
+the slowly tightening encirclement. That left only one option I could[r]
 think of.[pcms]
 
 [chara_int][trans_c cross time=150]
@@ -820,34 +821,33 @@ think of.[pcms]
 *104|
 [fc]
 [ns]Daisuke[nse]
-"Everyone, run to the administration building! Hurry!"[pcms]
+"Everyone, run into the management building! Hurry!"[pcms]
 
 ;//se049.ogg(LOOP)
 [se buf=0 storage="se049" loop=true]
 
 *105|
 [fc]
-I led the way, sprinting up the stairs to the administration building[r]
-and guiding everyone inside as I opened the door.[pcms]
+I led the way up the stairs of the management building and guided[r]
+everyone inside while opening the door.[pcms]
 
 *106|
 [fc]
 [ns]Daisuke[nse]
-"Makoto! Kozue! Masaka-san! Hurry, hurry!! Shou-kun! Saeko-san! This[r]
-way!"[pcms]
+"Makoto! Kozue! Masaka-san! Hurry up!! Shou-kun! Saeko-san! This way!"[pcms]
 
 *107|
 [fc]
-Kozue was the first to disappear inside the door, pulled by Makoto.[r]
-Next, Shou-kun, carrying Saeko-san, gasped for air as he vanished[r]
-beyond the door.[pcms]
+Kozue disappeared into the door first, pulled by Makoto. Then Shou-[r]
+kun, carrying Saeko-san in his arms, disappeared beyond the door,[r]
+gasping for breath.[pcms]
 
 ;//se即時停止
 [stopse buf=0]
 
 *108|
 [fc]
-Then--[pcms]
+And then--[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ma_UP_eC03"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=0 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -859,8 +859,8 @@ Then--[pcms]
 
 *110|
 [fc]
-Masaka-san stood still as a statue, clenching her fists and glaring at[r]
-the men with a stern look.[pcms]
+Masaka-san stood still like a statue, clenching her fists and glaring[r]
+at the men with a stern look.[pcms]
 
 *111|
 [fc]
@@ -871,13 +871,13 @@ the men with a stern look.[pcms]
 *112|
 [fc]
 For a moment, I was captivated by her dignified figure, but when I saw[r]
-Masaka-san's foot move towards the approaching man, I hurried down the[r]
-stairs to her side.[pcms]
+Masaka-san's foot about to step towards the approaching men, I hurried[r]
+down the stairs and ran to her side.[pcms]
 
 *113|
 [fc]
 [ns]Daisuke[nse]
-"Masaka-san! What are you doing?! Hurry!!"[pcms]
+"Masaka-san! What are you doing?! Hurry up!!"[pcms]
 
 [chara_int][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -886,19 +886,19 @@ stairs to her side.[pcms]
 
 *114|
 [fc]
-I grabbed Masaka-san's arm and, with that momentum, started running[r]
-towards the administration building. Masaka-san obediently followed[r]
+I grabbed Masaka-san's arm and started running towards the management[r]
+building, pulling her along with me. Masaka-san obediently followed[r]
 me. But--[pcms]
 
 *115|
 [fc]
 [vo_aya s="aya_0250"]
 [ns]Aya[nse]
-"I can't forgive them..."[pcms]
+"...Unforgivable..."[pcms]
 
 *116|
 [fc]
-While being pulled by the arm, she muttered softly.[pcms]
+While being pulled by me, she muttered softly.[pcms]
 
 ;//seフェード停止
 [stopse buf=0]
@@ -917,22 +917,22 @@ What on earth has happened?[pcms]
 *118|
 [fc]
 I was confused by the situation we were in. Everyone else must be[r]
-confused, bewildered, and scared too.[pcms]
+confused too, bewildered and scared.[pcms]
 
 *119|
 [fc]
-Just a few hours ago...we were all laughing. No, just a few days[r]
-ago... No, since the start of summer break...[pcms]
+Just a few hours ago... we were laughing. No, just a few days ago...[r]
+No, since the start of summer break...[pcms]
 
 *120|
 [fc]
-No, that's not right. We had been looking forward to this even before[r]
+No, that's not right. We were looking forward to this even before[r]
 summer break started. We were all laughing and spending time[r]
 together...[pcms]
 
 *121|
 [fc]
-That's right...it hasn't even been a month yet...[pcms]
+That's right... it hasn't even been a month yet...[pcms]
 
 [sysbt_meswin clear]
 
@@ -954,14 +954,15 @@ That's right...it hasn't even been a month yet...[pcms]
 *122|
 [fc]
 [ns]Teacher[nse]
-"...and one last thing. We're entering summer break in a few days... I[r]
-can sense some of you are already getting carried away. Make sure you[r]
-don't get too excited just because it's summer break."[pcms]
+"...and one last thing. We're just a few days away from summer[r]
+break... I get the feeling some of you are already getting carried[r]
+away. Make sure you don't get too excited just because it's vacation[r]
+time."[pcms]
 
 *123|
 [fc]
 [ns]Teacher[nse]
-"I'm counting on you, Abumi."[pcms]
+"I'm counting on you, Makoto."[pcms]
 
 ;//■_学校のパイプイスから勢いよく立ち上がる音
 ;//se014.ogg
@@ -973,12 +974,12 @@ don't get too excited just because it's summer break."[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_mak s="mako_0001"]
 [ns]Makoto[nse]
-"Hey, Teacher! Why are you singling me out?"[pcms]
+"Wait, Teacher! Why me?!"[pcms]
 
 *125|
 [fc]
-Makoto sat down next to me with a burst of energy. Rather than looking[r]
-angry, she seemed more exasperated or playful.[pcms]
+Makoto, who sat down next to me with vigor, seemed more amused than[r]
+angry, her expression playful.[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ab_aA04"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -986,13 +987,13 @@ angry, she seemed more exasperated or playful.[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_mak s="mako_0002"]
 [ns]Makoto[nse]
-"Geez, Teacher. That's like mental harassment."[pcms]
+"Geez, Teacher. That's like mental harassment, you know-"[pcms]
 
 *127|
 [fc]
 [ns]Teacher[nse]
-"Is that so? If that's the case, I feel like I'm being mentally[r]
-harassed every day. Right, Abumi?"[pcms]
+"Is that so? If that's the case, I feel like I'm the one who's being[r]
+mentally harassed every day. Right, Makoto?"[pcms]
 
 ;//■_ドッとした生徒の笑い声
 ;//se015.ogg
@@ -1004,12 +1005,12 @@ harassed every day. Right, Abumi?"[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_mak s="mako_0003"]
 [ns]Makoto[nse]
-"Wow, that's harsh! Why is everyone laughing at that?"[pcms]
+"Wow, that's harsh! Why does everyone laugh at that-"[pcms]
 
 *129|
 [fc]
 Even though she showed a slightly angry face, everyone in the class[r]
-knew it was just a pose.[pcms]
+knew it was just for show.[pcms]
 
 *130|
 [fc]
@@ -1018,7 +1019,7 @@ So, feeling reassured, I decided to tease her a little too.[pcms]
 *131|
 [fc]
 [ns]Daisuke[nse]
-"No kidding, Teacher really knows how to observe. Right, Makoto?"[pcms]
+"No kidding, the teacher really pays attention, huh? Right, Makoto?"[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ab_aA04"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -1026,7 +1027,7 @@ So, feeling reassured, I decided to tease her a little too.[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_mak s="mako_0004"]
 [ns]Makoto[nse]
-"Ugh. Even Daisuke is saying that..."[pcms]
+"Ugh. Even you, Daisuke? Saying something like that-"[pcms]
 
 ;//■_クスクスとした生徒の笑い声
 ;//se016.ogg
@@ -1035,8 +1036,8 @@ So, feeling reassured, I decided to tease her a little too.[pcms]
 *133|
 [fc]
 [ns]Teacher[nse]
-"Well, everyone make sure not to go overboard. Spare me from getting[r]
-an ulcer over summer break. I'm counting on youAbumi."[pcms]
+"Well, everyone, don't go too wild. Spare me from getting an ulcer[r]
+over the summer break. I'm counting on you, Makoto."[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ab_aA01"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -1055,22 +1056,22 @@ an ulcer over summer break. I'm counting on youAbumi."[pcms]
 *135|
 [fc]
 The classroom was buzzing with a cheerful atmosphere. Passing by[r]
-Makoto's resigned expression, my gaze inadvertently shifted to the[r]
+Makoto's annoyed expression, my gaze inadvertently shifted to the[r]
 female student sitting next to her.[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ma_aC03"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
 *136|
 [fc]
-Long black hair. A dignified face. She didn't partake in the[r]
-classroom's cheerful atmosphere and quietly stared at the blackboard[r]
-and only what was in front of her.[pcms]
+Long black hair. A dignified face. She wasn't partaking in the[r]
+classroom's cheerful atmosphere and was quietly staring at the[r]
+blackboard, focusing only on what was in front of her.[pcms]
 
 *137|
 [fc]
-Her beautiful features bore no expression. It was as if she couldn't[r]
-even hear the buzz of the classroom around her. She maintained her[r]
-dignified look without any sign of amazement or irritation.[pcms]
+Her beautiful features bore no expression. It was as if the[r]
+classroom's chatter didn't even reach her ears. Not out of disdain,[r]
+but maintaining a purely dignified expression.[pcms]
 
 [chara_int][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -1103,14 +1104,14 @@ classroom.[pcms]
 
 *140|
 [fc]
-Even after the teacher had left, a joyful atmosphere lingered in the[r]
-room. The sense of freedom after school probably contributed to it.[pcms]
+Even after the teacher had left, a lively atmosphere remained in the[r]
+room. The sense of freedom after school must have contributed to it.[pcms]
 
 *141|
 [fc]
 [vo_mob s="josiA_0001"]
 [ns]Female Student A[nse]
-"You got called out, Makoto-chan. Better be careful."[pcms]
+"Makoto-chan got called out by name. You better be careful!"[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ab_aA02"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -1129,7 +1130,7 @@ Makoto dutifully responded and stood up from her seat.[pcms]
 
 *144|
 [fc]
-Really now, she's hopeless. But I guess that's one of Makoto's good[r]
+Really, she's hopeless. But I guess that's one of Makoto's good[r]
 points.[pcms]
 
 *145|
@@ -1140,84 +1141,83 @@ With Makoto standing up, I could clearly see her from my seat.[pcms]
 
 *145a|
 [fc]
-Aya. As usual, she began packing up with an expressionless face.[pcms]
+Aya. As usual, she began packing up to leave with an expressionless[r]
+face.[pcms]
 
 *146|
 [fc]
-She gracefully placed her bag on the desk and took out her portable[r]
-music player with reverence. It adorned her ears whenever she left the[r]
+She gracefully placed her bag on the desk and solemnly took out her[r]
+portable music player. It adorned her ears whenever she left the[r]
 classroom.[pcms]
 
 *147|
 [fc]
 Then she took out textbooks from her desk and started putting[r]
-everything into her bag. Her desk was always empty after she left.[pcms]
+everything into her bag. After she left, her desk was always empty.[pcms]
 
 *148|
 [fc]
-She was the only one detached from the current cheerful atmosphere of[r]
-the classroom.[pcms]
+She was the only one seemingly detached from the current joyful[r]
+atmosphere of the classroom.[pcms]
 
 *149|
 [fc]
-No, was she detaching herself? It wasn't like she was being bullied or[r]
-anything. There was no bullying in our class now.[pcms]
+No, was she detaching herself on purpose? It wasn't like she was being[r]
+bullied or anything. There was no bullying in our class.[pcms]
 
 *150|
 [fc]
-If anything, the atmosphere is quite harmonious. Especially during[r]
-festival celebrations, the whole class moves forward as one. There are[r]
-different groups, but there's no conflict.[pcms]
+If anything, the class was harmonious. We all dove into festival-like[r]
+celebrations as one group. There were different cliques, but no[r]
+conflicts.[pcms]
 
 *151|
 [fc]
-In the midst of that, she seems to prefer being alone, at least that's[r]
-how it appears to me.[pcms]
+In such an environment, she seemed to prefer being alone.[pcms]
 
 *152|
 [fc]
-I wonder why...[pcms]
+Why is that...?[pcms]
 
 *153|
 [fc]
-It's not like we've never spoken before. No, maybe it's not right to[r]
-say we've spoken. It's more like I know her through Saeko-san.[pcms]
+It's not like we've never spoken before. Well, it might not count as a[r]
+conversation. It's more like I know of her through Saeko-san.[pcms]
 
 *154|
 [fc]
-She seems to be good friends with Saeko-san, and I was introduced to[r]
-her when they were together, exchanging greetings.[pcms]
+Saeko-san seems to be good friends with her; they're often together,[r]
+and that's when I was introduced and we exchanged greetings.[pcms]
 
 *155|
 [fc]
-We've been in the same class since this year.[pcms]
+We've been in the same class since this year started.[pcms]
 
 *156|
 [fc]
 But even though we're in the same class now, I can't recall having a[r]
-proper conversation with her. It's not that she's avoiding me; if I[r]
-greet her, she'll bow her head politely. That's the kind of[r]
-interaction we have.[pcms]
+proper conversation with her. It's not that she avoids me; if I greet[r]
+her, she'll bow her head politely in response. That's about it.[pcms]
 
 *157|
 [fc]
-It's such a waste. It's a waste, right? We have a mutual friend, after[r]
-all. If possible, I'd like to get along and hang out together...[pcms]
+It's such a waste. We have a common friend after all. If possible, I'd[r]
+like to hang out and get along...[pcms]
 
 *158|
 [fc]
-What should I do? Should I try talking to her? Fortunately, the[r]
-classroom is still noisy. If I call out to her discreetly from behind[r]
-my desk, it shouldn't draw too much attention.[pcms]
+What should I do? Should I try talking to her? Luckily, the classroom[r]
+is still noisy. If I call out to her discreetly from behind my desk,[r]
+it won't draw too much attention.[pcms]
 
 *159|
 [fc]
-I'll talk to Saeko-san later, and if I bring her up as a topic, it[r]
-won't seem odd to invite her to hang out... right?[pcms]
+I'll talk to Saeko-san later and use her as a topic to invite Aya out[r]
+without making it feel awkward... right?[pcms]
 
 *160|
 [fc]
-...Alright. A man's got to have courage![pcms]
+...Alright. A man's gotta have guts![pcms]
 
 *161|
 [fc]
@@ -1239,8 +1239,8 @@ won't seem odd to invite her to hang out... right?[pcms]
 
 *164|
 [fc]
-From my blind spot, slightly behind Masaka-san, a classmate of mine[r]
-had called out to her.[pcms]
+From my blind spot, slightly behind and to the side of Masaka-san, a[r]
+classmate called out to her.[pcms]
 
 *165|
 [fc]
@@ -1249,20 +1249,20 @@ had called out to her.[pcms]
 
 *166|
 [fc]
-Hey now. That's what I wanted to say. Even though the place I wanted[r]
-to invite her to is different.[pcms]
+Hey, hey. That's what I wanted to say. Even if the place I wanted to[r]
+invite her to was different.[pcms]
 
 *167|
 [fc]
-But still, it's bold of him to come out and say it first. I was[r]
+But to be so bold as to just come out and say it first... I was[r]
 thinking of taking a more roundabout approach.[pcms]
 
 ;//♂佐藤：ここから追加しました。
 
 *168|
 [fc]
-A roundabout approach... Now that I think about it, that was also a[r]
-chance for me to speak up.[pcms]
+A roundabout approach... Come to think of it, that was also a chance[r]
+to talk to her.[pcms]
 
 *169|
 [fc]
@@ -1281,17 +1281,17 @@ But then, there was "that accident"...[pcms]
 
 *171|
 [fc]
-In front of me, the summer breeze played a trick.[pcms]
+In front of my eyes, the summer breeze played a trick.[pcms]
 
 *172|
 [fc]
-And since that moment, maybe I've been gradually becoming more aware[r]
-of Masaka-san.[pcms]
+And since that time, maybe I've been gradually, little by little,[r]
+becoming aware of Masaka-san.[pcms]
 
 *173|
 [fc]
-I went up to the rooftop during lunch break to stretch out a bit. But[r]
-there was someone there before me.[pcms]
+I went up to the rooftop during lunch break to stretch out, but there[r]
+was someone there before me.[pcms]
 
 *174|
 [fc]
@@ -1299,7 +1299,7 @@ That person showed me something shocking.[pcms]
 
 *175|
 [fc]
-Though it's not like they "showed" it to me on purpose...[pcms]
+Of course, it's not like she "showed" it to me on purpose...[pcms]
 
 ;//システムアイコン消去＆メッセージウィンドウ消去
 [sysbt_meswin clear]
@@ -1369,9 +1369,9 @@ I saw it...[pcms]
 
 *179|
 [fc]
-Her slender legs were encased in black nylon. The firm body seemed to[r]
-push against the black nylon, almost making the pale skin beneath seem[r]
-translucent.[pcms]
+Her slender legs were tightly encased in black nylon. The firm body[r]
+seemed to push against the black nylon, almost making the white skin[r]
+beneath seem translucent.[pcms]
 
 *180|
 [fc]
@@ -1380,11 +1380,11 @@ translucent.[pcms]
 
 *181|
 [fc]
-I involuntarily swallowed my saliva.[pcms]
+I couldn't help but swallow my saliva.[pcms]
 
 *182|
 [fc]
-Yes, hidden by the shadow of stockings and skirt, was the last bastion[r]
+Yes, hidden in the shadow of stockings and skirt, was the last bastion[r]
 covering the most crucial part. And I had seen what I wasn't supposed[r]
 to see.[pcms]
 
@@ -1396,7 +1396,7 @@ to see.[pcms]
 
 *184|
 [fc]
-A panty flash... no, a full panty shot! I saw something good...[pcms]
+A panty shot... no, a full panty reveal! I saw something good...[pcms]
 
 *185|
 [fc]
@@ -1404,12 +1404,12 @@ No, that's not it! This is bad! If she realizes I saw her panties...![pcms]
 
 *186|
 [fc]
-Because I was panicking so much, it finally dawned on me that the[r]
-person showing me her panties was Masaka-san.[pcms]
+Because I was panicking so much, it took me a moment to realize that[r]
+the person showing me her panties was Masaka-san.[pcms]
 
 *187|
 [fc]
-This is bad... If Saeko-san finds out... Everyone will hate me...[pcms]
+This is bad... If Saeko-san finds out... I'll be hated by everyone...[pcms]
 
 *188|
 [fc]
@@ -1419,17 +1419,17 @@ This is bad... If Saeko-san finds out... Everyone will hate me...[pcms]
 
 *189|
 [fc]
-Does Masaka-san realize that I saw her panties? She seems aware of my[r]
-presence though...[pcms]
+Does Masaka-san not realize that I saw her panties? She seems aware of[r]
+my presence though...[pcms]
 
 *190|
 [fc]
-No, there's no time to think about that! I need to get out of here![pcms]
+No, there's no time to think about that! I've got to run away![pcms]
 
 *191|
 [fc]
 [ns]Daisuke[nse]
-"So-sorry!"[pcms]
+"I'm sorry!"[pcms]
 
 [black_toplayer][trans_c cross time=1000][hide_chara_int]
 
@@ -1443,18 +1443,16 @@ Thinking back on it now, why did I apologize...?[pcms]
 
 *194|
 [fc]
-If I had just acted normal and talked to Masaka-san then, we might[r]
-have become closer since that day. We haven't been alone together[r]
-since then.[pcms]
+If I had just acted as if nothing happened and talked to Masaka-san[r]
+then, we might have been alone together again since that time.[pcms]
 
 *195|
 [fc]
-If I had talked to her then, maybe we could have become more intimate[r]
-with Masaka-san.[pcms]
+If I had talked to her then, maybe we could have become closer.[pcms]
 
 *196|
 [fc]
-Then I wouldn't be having these troubles now...[pcms]
+If only I had done that, I wouldn't be having these troubles now...[pcms]
 
 ;//■_教室内のガヤ（ループ）
 ;//se020.ogg(LOOP)
@@ -1468,41 +1466,42 @@ Then I wouldn't be having these troubles now...[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_aya s="aya_0002"]
 [ns]Aya[nse]
-"...Sorry, but... could you try asking someone else..."[pcms]
+"...Sorry, but... try asking someone else..."[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ma_aC03"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
 *198|
 [fc]
 With those words, she turned around once and then coldly turned her[r]
-back on the guy who had approached her. There was no way in for him.[pcms]
+back on the guy who had approached her. There was no island for him to[r]
+cling to.[pcms]
 
 [chara_int][trans_c cross time=150]
 
 *199|
 [fc]
 [ns]Male Student A[nse]
-Ah... my momentum was completely killed. Just my luck, someone else[r]
-was thinking the same thing at this moment. And right in front of me,[r]
-they went down in flames.[pcms]
+"..."[pcms]
 
 *200|
 [fc]
-"...sigh..."[pcms]
+Ah... my momentum was completely crushed. To think that someone else[r]
+was contemplating the same thing right now. And to see them sink so[r]
+spectacularly right in front of me.[pcms]
 
 *201|
 [fc]
 [ns]Daisuke[nse]
-I couldn't help but let out a sigh.[pcms]
+"...Phew..."[pcms]
 
 *202|
 [fc]
-My gaze was still fixed on her, but the resolve I had just a moment[r]
-ago seemed to be dissipating like mist.[pcms]
+I couldn't help but let out a sigh.[pcms]
 
 *203|
 [fc]
-"...?"[pcms]
+My gaze was still fixed on her as always, but the resolve I had just a[r]
+moment ago seemed to be dissipating.[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ma_aC01"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -1510,12 +1509,12 @@ ago seemed to be dissipating like mist.[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_aya s="aya_0003"]
 [ns]Aya[nse]
-Huh? Did she notice my sigh? She turned around and our eyes met[r]
-squarely.[pcms]
+"...?"[pcms]
 
 *205|
 [fc]
-"..."[pcms]
+Huh? Did she notice my sigh? She turned around and our eyes met[r]
+squarely.[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ma_aB03"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -1523,23 +1522,23 @@ squarely.[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_aya s="aya_0004"]
 [ns]Aya[nse]
-She quickly looked down again.[pcms]
+"..."[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ma_aB02"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
 *207|
 [fc]
-But there's no mistake that our eyes met, and at the very least, she[r]
-must have realized that I was looking at her.[pcms]
+She quickly looked down again.[pcms]
 
 *208|
 [fc]
-What should I do? Isn't this a chance? It's the first time our eyes[r]
-have met head-on, right?[pcms]
+But there was no mistaking that our eyes had met, and at the very[r]
+least, she must have realized that I was looking at her.[pcms]
 
 *209|
 [fc]
-; (link target=*A0010_B)It ended with just a gaze(endlink)[pcms]
+What should I do? Isn't this a chance? It's the first time our eyes[r]
+have met head-on, right?[pcms]
 
 ;//----------------------------------------------------------
 ;//＠選択肢発生：変化内容：真坂に対する好感度ポイント
@@ -1547,16 +1546,14 @@ have met head-on, right?[pcms]
 ;//２．見つめただけで終わる
 
 ;	[link target=*A0010_A]このまま声をかける[endlink]
-That's right. At least I'm different from the guy who messed up[r]
-earlier. I have a common friend, Saeko-san. We've only exchanged[r]
-greetings, but we're not complete strangers.[pcms]
+; (link target=*A0010_B)It ended with just a gaze(endlink)[pcms]
 
 *SEL01|このまま声をかける／見つめただけで終わる
 [fc]
 [pcms_sel]
 
 ;mm 選択肢2個は46使用にしよう。キャラ立ってると顔に被るから。
-[eval exp="f.seltext04 = 'Speak to them as is'"]
+[eval exp="f.seltext04 = 'Approach and call out to them'"]
 [eval exp="f.seltext06 = 'It ends with just a gaze'"]
 
 [if exp="tf.sys_sub == 0 || tf.選択肢ログ表示してね == 1"]
@@ -1597,12 +1594,14 @@ greetings, but we're not complete strangers.[pcms]
 
 *210|
 [fc]
-"Masaka-san..."[pcms]
+That's right. At least I'm different from the guy who just failed. I[r]
+have a common friend, Saeko-san. We only greet each other, but we're[r]
+not complete strangers.[pcms]
 
 *211|
 [fc]
 [ns]Daisuke[nse]
-"..."[pcms]
+"Masaka-san..."[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ma_aA07"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -1610,16 +1609,16 @@ greetings, but we're not complete strangers.[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_aya s="aya_0005"]
 [ns]Aya[nse]
-She slowly lifted her face that had been looking down.[pcms]
+"..."[pcms]
 
 *213|
 [fc]
-"...You're always alone, aren't you?"[pcms]
+She slowly lifted her face that had been looking down.[pcms]
 
 *214|
 [fc]
 [ns]Daisuke[nse]
-"!"[pcms]
+"...You're always alone, aren't you?"[pcms]
 
 [ChrSetEx layer=5 chbase="ma_aA06"][ChrSetXY layer=5 x=162 y=0][trans_c cross time=150]
 
@@ -1627,41 +1626,42 @@ She slowly lifted her face that had been looking down.[pcms]
 [fc]
 [vo_aya s="aya_0006"]
 [ns]Aya[nse]
-"..."[pcms]
+"!"[pcms]
 
 *216|
 [fc]
 [ns]Daisuke[nse]
-I hesitated to say the next words.[pcms]
+"..."[pcms]
 
 [chara_int][trans_c cross time=150]
 
 *217|
 [fc]
-She remained silent.[pcms]
+I hesitated to say the next words.[pcms]
 
 *218|
 [fc]
+She remained silent.[pcms]
+
+*219|
+[fc]
 Her eyes, which had firmly met mine for a moment, even if just[r]
 briefly.[pcms]
 
-*219|
-[fc]
-She quickly looked away again and bowed her head, but sadness had[r]
-surfaced in her eyes...[pcms]
-
 *220|
 [fc]
-I don't think I'm particularly sensitive to people's feelings. I'm not[r]
-insensitive, but I think I'm average in that regard.[pcms]
+She quickly averted her gaze again and looked down, but sadness had[r]
+surfaced in her eyes...[pcms]
 
 *221|
 [fc]
-But I couldn't help but notice the sadness that appeared in her eyes.[pcms]
+I don't think I'm particularly sensitive to people's feelings. I'm not[r]
+insensitive, but I think I'm about average.[pcms]
 
 *222|
 [fc]
-Was it something I shouldn't have said...?[pcms]
+However, I couldn't help but notice the sadness that appeared in her[r]
+eyes.[pcms]
 
 ;//seフェード停止
 [stopse buf=0]
@@ -1672,12 +1672,12 @@ Was it something I shouldn't have said...?[pcms]
 
 *223|
 [fc]
-Did I say something unnecessary...? It was supposed to be just a[r]
-conversation starter...[pcms]
+Was it something I shouldn't have said...?[pcms]
 
 *224|
 [fc]
-Ah, it's no good after all. My energy has gone somewhere else.[pcms]
+Did I say something unnecessary...? It was supposed to be just a[r]
+conversation starter...[pcms]
 
 ;//〆：真坂ポイント＋１
 [eval exp="f.l_masaka = f.l_masaka + 1"]
@@ -1698,46 +1698,46 @@ Ah, it's no good after all. My energy has gone somewhere else.[pcms]
 
 *225|
 [fc]
-After turning her back to the person who had spoken to her, she bit[r]
-her lip as if to hold back her emotions and remained looking down.[pcms]
+Ah, it's no good after all. My willpower has gone somewhere else.[pcms]
 
 *226|
 [fc]
-I thought she had a beautiful profile.[pcms]
+After turning her back on the guy who had spoken to her, she bit her[r]
+lip as if in frustration and remained looking down.[pcms]
 
 *227|
 [fc]
-Pale skin. Black, glossy hair that accentuated her whiteness. Well-[r]
-defined features.[pcms]
+I thought her profile was beautiful.[pcms]
 
 *228|
 [fc]
-Come to think of it, although I knew of her through Saeko-san, maybe I[r]
-hadn't really looked at her properly before.[pcms]
+Her white skin. The black, glossy hair that accentuated that[r]
+whiteness. Well-defined features.[pcms]
 
 *229|
 [fc]
-Now, belatedly, I found myself captivated by her dignified appearance.[pcms]
+Come to think of it, although I knew her through Saeko-san, maybe I[r]
+hadn't really looked at her properly before.[pcms]
 
 *230|
 [fc]
-There's no need to rush. There will surely be more chances to talk to[r]
-her in the future. Saeko-san is there too. Next time, definitely next[r]
-time.[pcms]
+Now, belatedly, I found myself captivated by her dignified appearance.[pcms]
 
 *231|
 [fc]
-The profile I had been staring at. Her eyebrows furrowed slightly. A[r]
-face that seemed on the verge of tears. It felt like she was[r]
-suppressing those emotions.[pcms]
+There's no need to rush. There will surely be other chances to talk to[r]
+her in the future. Saeko-san is there too. Next time, definitely next[r]
+time.[pcms]
 
 *232|
 [fc]
-Why is that...?[pcms]
+The profile I was gazing at. Her eyebrows furrowed slightly. A face[r]
+that seemed on the verge of tears. It felt like she was suppressing[r]
+those emotions.[pcms]
 
 *233|
 [fc]
-Doesn't she want to be alone...?[pcms]
+Why is that...?[pcms]
 
 ;//seフェード停止
 [stopse buf=0]
@@ -1748,7 +1748,7 @@ Doesn't she want to be alone...?[pcms]
 
 *234|
 [fc]
-Is that just my own assumption...?[pcms]
+Doesn't she want to be alone...?[pcms]
 
 *235|
 [fc]
diff --git a/Kansen4_patch/bg_conf_mes_t.png b/Kansen4_patch/bg_conf_mes_t.png
index da88d2d..44fbf20 100644
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diff --git a/Kansen4_patch/first_sub_xy.ks b/Kansen4_patch/first_sub_xy.ks
index 7006c9e..8ac3e8c 100644
--- a/Kansen4_patch/first_sub_xy.ks
+++ b/Kansen4_patch/first_sub_xy.ks
@@ -693,7 +693,7 @@
 
 ;選択肢の座標を配列で用意
 [eval exp="sf.selold_x = []"]
-[eval exp="sf.selold_x[0] = (1024-800)/2"]
+[eval exp="sf.selold_x[0] = (1024-800)/4"]
 ;座標とマクロ位置合わせにくいから[1]から使用する
 ;[eval exp="sf.selold_y = [0,100,150,200,250,300,350,400,450,500]"]
 ;800600だと４こ（１３５７）にしたときに７がウィンドウに被ってかっこ悪いから全体的に調整
@@ -715,7 +715,7 @@
 ;選択肢のフォントサイズ定義
 ;[eval exp="sf.selfont = 24"]
 ;選択肢のフォントサイズ定義
-[eval exp="sf.seltext_size = 20"]
+[eval exp="sf.seltext_size = 18"]
 ;文字列のマージントップ
 [eval exp="sf.sel_text_mt = 8"]
 
diff --git a/Kansen4_patch/title_start.png b/Kansen4_patch/title_start.png
deleted file mode 100644
index c7f762f..0000000
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