From a13e4e81cac9273cd21efccfa052fe9e10531f6e Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: no Date: Tue, 11 Nov 2025 04:26:51 +0200 Subject: [PATCH] proofreading (mostly narration) --- www/data/Map006.json | 2 +- www/data/Map015.json | 22 +++++++++++----------- www/data/Map017.json | 12 ++++++------ www/data/Map018.json | 6 +++--- www/data/Map019.json | 22 +++++++++++----------- www/data/Map020.json | 2 +- www/data/Map021.json | 2 +- www/data/Map022.json | 2 +- www/data/Map023.json | 2 +- www/data/Map025.json | 8 ++++---- www/data/Map026.json | 4 ++-- www/data/Map028.json | 8 ++++---- 12 files changed, 46 insertions(+), 46 deletions(-) diff --git a/www/data/Map006.json b/www/data/Map006.json index fccb052..2e4788e 100644 --- a/www/data/Map006.json +++ b/www/data/Map006.json @@ -3210,7 +3210,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Red Oni defeated bonus! You gained \\c[23]10\\c[0] Spirit Energy!" + "Red Oni defeated! You gained \\c[23]10\\c[0] Spirit Energy!" ] }, { diff --git a/www/data/Map015.json b/www/data/Map015.json index 8676826..4226ee6 100644 --- a/www/data/Map015.json +++ b/www/data/Map015.json @@ -14664,7 +14664,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "You have to get out of here before the Red Oni breaks free.\nBut \\N[1]'s eyes are glued to one spot." + "He has to get out of there before the Red Oni breaks free.\nBut \\N[1]'s eyes are glued to one spot." ] }, { @@ -14793,7 +14793,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "With every movement she makes, her breasts change shape and\njiggle invitingly, as if luring you in." + "With every movement she makes, her breasts change shape and\njiggle invitingly, as if luring his in." ] }, { @@ -14825,7 +14825,7 @@ "indent": 0, "parameters": [ [ - "Touch her", + "Touch them", "Leave this place" ], -1, @@ -14918,7 +14918,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 1, "parameters": [ - "Nervously, you poke the Red Oni's breast with your\nfingertip." + "Nervously, he pokes the Red Oni's breast with his\nfingertip." ] }, { @@ -14942,7 +14942,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 1, "parameters": [ - "It's so soft, you feel like your finger might get swallowed\nup. The sensation instantly captivates you." + "It's so soft, he feels like his finger might get swallowed\nup. The sensation instantly captivates him." ] }, { @@ -15163,7 +15163,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 1, "parameters": [ - "Right in front of you, the Red Oni bares her sharp teeth and\nstruggles to break free from her restraints." + "Right in front of him, the Red Oni bares her sharp teeth and\nstruggles to break free from her restraints." ] }, { @@ -15211,7 +15211,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 1, "parameters": [ - "If you take too long, you might get attacked. If you're\ngoing to leave, now's your only chance." + "Staying here any longer could be dangerous.\nIf he was to leave, the moment was now." ] }, { @@ -15257,7 +15257,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 2, "parameters": [ - "Even though you know that, you can't suppress your arousal.\n\\N[1] sinks even deeper into temptation." + "Even though he knows that, he can't suppress his arousal.\n\\N[1] sinks even deeper into temptation." ] }, { @@ -15361,7 +15361,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 2, "parameters": [ - "This time, you grab her breast with your whole hand. It\nfeels like not just your fingers, but your entire arm is\nsinking into her chest." + "This time, he grabs her breast with his whole hand. It\nfeels like not just his fingers, but his entire arm is\nsinking into her chest." ] }, { @@ -15385,7 +15385,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 2, "parameters": [ - "Your heartbeat quickens and your breathing grows ragged. All\nthe blood in your body rushes to your palm and your lower\nhalf, making it hard to think." + "His heartbeat quickens and breathing grows ragged. All the\nblood in his body rushes to his palm and his lower\nhalf, making it hard to think." ] }, { @@ -15409,7 +15409,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 2, "parameters": [ - "You find yourself wanting to be swallowed up by the Red\nOni's breasts completely. That thought drifts through your\ndazed mind." + "He finds himself wanting to be swallowed up by the Red\nOni's breasts completely. That thought drifts through his\ndazed mind." ] }, { diff --git a/www/data/Map017.json b/www/data/Map017.json index 93c8c2f..61b833a 100644 --- a/www/data/Map017.json +++ b/www/data/Map017.json @@ -2172,7 +2172,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Placed a stone in the classroom.\\c[23](\\V[4] left)\\c[0]" + "Placed a stone in the classroom. \\c[23](\\V[4] left)\\c[0]" ] }, { @@ -2364,7 +2364,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Letting Ruri pull me along, I ran down the hallway without\nunderstanding what was going on." + "Letting Ruri pull him along, he ran down the hallway\nwithout understanding what was going on." ] }, { @@ -2470,7 +2470,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "I let her know I was fine for now. But more than that, there\nwere a lot of things I wanted to ask." + "He let her know he was fine for now. But more than that,\nthere were a lot of things he wanted to ask." ] }, { @@ -3099,7 +3099,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "What Ruri handed me looked like three talismans." + "What Ruri handed him looked like three talismans." ] }, { @@ -3302,7 +3302,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Next, Ruri handed me a stone small enough to fit in my palm." + "Next, Ruri handed him a stone small enough to fit in his\npalm." ] }, { @@ -3980,7 +3980,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "The save function is temporarily restricted. You can only\nsave at the \\c[24]magic circle in this classroom\\c[0]. (You can't save\nif the Red Oni has found you.)" + "The save function is temporarily restricted. You can only\nsave at the \\c[24]magic circle in this classroom\\c[0].\n(You can't save if the Red Oni has found you.)" ] }, { diff --git a/www/data/Map018.json b/www/data/Map018.json index be89cd7..9134ce8 100644 --- a/www/data/Map018.json +++ b/www/data/Map018.json @@ -2440,7 +2440,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Looking closer, Ranna's shoulders and legs are trembling\nslightly." + "Looking closer, Ranna's shoulders and legs were trembling\nslightly." ] }, { @@ -2488,7 +2488,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "―Honestly, it's almost strange how calm I am right now." + "―Honestly, it's almost strange how calm he was right now." ] }, { @@ -3122,7 +3122,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Placed a stone in the classroom.\\c[23](\\V[4] left)\\c[0]" + "Placed a stone in the classroom. \\c[23](\\V[4] left)\\c[0]" ] }, { diff --git a/www/data/Map019.json b/www/data/Map019.json index ab263f8..5d68c75 100644 --- a/www/data/Map019.json +++ b/www/data/Map019.json @@ -3241,7 +3241,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "I quickly grabbed the fire extinguisher sitting in the\ncorner of the room and faced the monster." + "He quickly grabbed the fire extinguisher sitting in the\ncorner of the room and faced the monster." ] }, { @@ -3265,7 +3265,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "I figured my only options were to either spray it to blind\nher, or use it as a weapon and fight back." + "He figured his only options were to either spray it to\nblind her, or use it as a weapon and fight back." ] }, { @@ -3365,7 +3365,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "The monster stopped moving. Maybe she was being cautious of\nme." + "The monster stopped moving. Maybe she was being cautious of\nhim." ] }, { @@ -3389,7 +3389,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "If that's the case, good. I slowly backed away, careful not\nto provoke her." + "If that's the case, good. He slowly backed away, careful not\nto provoke her." ] }, { @@ -3645,7 +3645,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "This is it for me――\\! Or so I thought." + "It was all over!\\! Or so he thought." ] }, { @@ -3878,7 +3878,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "――I couldn't comprehend what just happened." + "――He couldn't comprehend what just happened." ] }, { @@ -4637,7 +4637,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Placed a stone in the classroom.\\c[23](\\V[4] left)\\c[0]" + "Placed a stone in the classroom. \\c[23](\\V[4] left)\\c[0]" ] }, { @@ -6263,7 +6263,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Should I try coming out from under the bed...?" + "Maybe it's time to come out from under the bed...?" ] }, { @@ -8247,7 +8247,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Should I try coming out from under the bed...?" + "Maybe it's time to come out from under the bed...?" ] }, { @@ -10067,7 +10067,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Should I try coming out from under the bed...?" + "Maybe it's time to come out from under the bed...?" ] }, { @@ -11887,7 +11887,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Should I try coming out from under the bed...?" + "Maybe it's time to come out from under the bed...?" ] }, { diff --git a/www/data/Map020.json b/www/data/Map020.json index 81460fe..973cf11 100644 --- a/www/data/Map020.json +++ b/www/data/Map020.json @@ -2446,7 +2446,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Placed a stone in the classroom.\\c[23](\\V[4] left)\\c[0]" + "Placed a stone in the classroom. \\c[23](\\V[4] left)\\c[0]" ] }, { diff --git a/www/data/Map021.json b/www/data/Map021.json index f0ab7cb..d24c897 100644 --- a/www/data/Map021.json +++ b/www/data/Map021.json @@ -2003,7 +2003,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Placed a stone in the classroom.\\c[23](\\V[4] left)\\c[0]" + "Placed a stone in the classroom. \\c[23](\\V[4] left)\\c[0]" ] }, { diff --git a/www/data/Map022.json b/www/data/Map022.json index be8fc59..7ee56ed 100644 --- a/www/data/Map022.json +++ b/www/data/Map022.json @@ -1594,7 +1594,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Placed a stone in the classroom.\\c[23](\\V[4] left)\\c[0]" + "Placed a stone in the classroom. \\c[23](\\V[4] left)\\c[0]" ] }, { diff --git a/www/data/Map023.json b/www/data/Map023.json index 51b9d76..ca60eca 100644 --- a/www/data/Map023.json +++ b/www/data/Map023.json @@ -2265,7 +2265,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Placed a stone in the classroom.\\c[23](\\V[4] left)\\c[0]" + "Placed a stone in the classroom. \\c[23](\\V[4] left)\\c[0]" ] }, { diff --git a/www/data/Map025.json b/www/data/Map025.json index 120965b..8459c4a 100644 --- a/www/data/Map025.json +++ b/www/data/Map025.json @@ -8148,7 +8148,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "The moment I thought we'd won..." + "The moment they thought they'd won..." ] }, { @@ -8229,7 +8229,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Ruri (She broke the chains with brute force...? Even after I\nweakened her just to be safe...)" + "Ruri\n(She broke the chains with brute force...? Even after I\nplayed safe and weakened her...)" ] }, { @@ -8246,7 +8246,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Ruri (\\c[18]Red Oni\\c[0]... was way stronger than I imagined...!\nSomeone like me can't win...)" + "Ruri\n(\\c[18]Red Oni\\c[0]... was way stronger than I imagined...!\nSomeone like me can't win...)" ] }, { @@ -8263,7 +8263,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "Ruri (At this rate, \"I'll be next\"...)" + "Ruri\n(At this rate, \"I'll be next\"...)" ] }, { diff --git a/www/data/Map026.json b/www/data/Map026.json index cbb453b..246afaa 100644 --- a/www/data/Map026.json +++ b/www/data/Map026.json @@ -7015,7 +7015,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "From here on, watch out for their attacks too. Sorry, but\nstall for time until we're ready...!" + "From here on, watch out for its attacks too. Please, \nstall for time until we're ready...!" ] }, { @@ -10001,7 +10001,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 1, "parameters": [ - "Ruri (They really have a knack for this... Maybe they'll be\nable to handle that technique too.)" + "Ruri\n(He really has a knack for this... Maybe he'll be\nable to handle that technique too.)" ] }, { diff --git a/www/data/Map028.json b/www/data/Map028.json index 207d10e..1e39dd0 100644 --- a/www/data/Map028.json +++ b/www/data/Map028.json @@ -7613,7 +7613,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "There was definitely a response. But it seems it wasn't\nenough to take the Red Oni's life." + "There was definitely some impact. But it seems it wasn't\nenough to take the Red Oni's life." ] }, { @@ -8351,7 +8351,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "It took a moment to process what had just happened before my\neyes." + "It took a moment to process what had just happened before\nhis eyes." ] }, { @@ -8375,7 +8375,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "The abnormality I encountered last night. It suddenly\nappeared right in front of me―" + "The abnormality he encountered last night. It suddenly\nappeared right in front of him―" ] }, { @@ -8399,7 +8399,7 @@ "code": 401, "indent": 0, "parameters": [ - "And completely obliterated the Red Oni, who had given us so\nmuch trouble." + "And completely obliterated the Red Oni, who had given them\nsomuch trouble." ] }, {